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  1. Hello @Dan, the overall theme of your group, while simple, is quite charming. I would also like to add that your grammar is exquisite and I found zero issues. Unfortunately there are some small things that need to be worked on. 

    • Goal number #2 is quite perplexing. Is your group of friendly traders going to be seeking bandits and delivering justice? Or are they rather going to refrain from giving certain bandits the good Samaritan discount? Would it not be better for business to be completely neutral and not openly pick sides? 
    • How exactly do you plan on going about goal #3? Does spreading trade mean multiple trade posts or perhaps you will have a traveling salesman? Some clarification would be appreciated. 
    • For goal #5, is your home and the secret base of operation separate or are they the same thing? Why exactly is it even necessary to have a secret base of operations?
    • Finally, the majority of your group have not been in game in months. This group will not be approved until all members are active in game. 

    Other than that the group looks great. If you have any questions, please contact me. Thanks. 

  2. Hello @Sylva, the graphics and overall layout of your thread are very nice. I like what you did with the hyperlinked member pictures. I also admire the intent of this group. However, there are a few issues that need to be addressed. 

    • While your background is a nice personal narrative for Alex Riley it explains next to nothing about the creation of the group. Remember that group backgrounds should not be a back story for any one member. Also, where is Plato or any of his teachings present in your group lore? Considering you have goals and even the title about The Republic you would think it would be mentioned n the group lore. You need to explain why the group is using an ancient text as the foundation of their beliefs.
    • Your last two goals seem to contradict one another. You want to be isolationist, but you also want to establish a rp hotspot? I'm afraid you can't have both on this server. Along the same lines, goals 2 and 5 seem very similar. Is your home to become the hotspot or are they to be separate? If they are to be the same then one of these goals should be cut. 
    • Lastly, what exactly is your group? After perusing your thread it isn't very clear what your group wants to be. I understand what it wants to be on an OOC level, but IC'ly, what is your groups identity? Your goals and group lore should reflect this. 

    If you have any questions or need help, let me know. Thanks. 

  3. Hello @Luke Dowsett, the overall premise of the group seems promising but I found several flaws that need to be rectified. 

    • Your roster spreadsheet is neat, but all group threads are required to have a roster that has links to each individual member's profile. 
    • One paragraph group lores are not acceptable, the expected number is at least three paragraphs. 
    • There are numerous grammar mistakes, primarily capitalization, that need fixing.
    • I'm a little confused on your first line of your group lore, " to help fill a spot for the end of cold war era"   what does this even mean? What would need filling after the Cold War?
    • Why would the Ukrainian government contract a company to gather weapons from any country, especially one that it doesn't share any borders with? On top of that, why would they care once the infection has started? This directive needs to be modified. 
    • The timestamps by your goals should align with 'days since infection start' timer on the homepage
    • Why does your group care if I'm wearing an American hoodie? I thought y'all were being contracted by Ukraine? 
    • Why would your group ever want to secure American guns? Wouldn't, if anything, you want to secure Ukraine guns? I thought they were the ones to contract you, not America? Regardless, Ukraine is in no shape to pay you, and you have no real communication with America, so why keep this fruitless mission alive? 
    • Why would your group, a PMC group being paid, want to setup a government? What's in it for them? If they are intent on taking all American guns then how can you expect people to follow you and obey you? 
    • Your final three goals aren't really goals but rather a group policy and should be labeled as such. 

    Overall this group need some work, but I'm sure you can make it the best group that it can be. If you require assistance, don't be afraid to reach out. Thanks. 

  4. I've been a long time advocate for the 20 year time jump for quite some time. I've even started to write an unofficial time warp lore simply dubbed 'Chernaurus 2038'. Basically the premise is 4 warring factions: a large bandit clan on the northern highway, a neo-Nazi Chernarussian group in Zeleno, a communist state in Cherno and Elektro, and finally a 'peaceful' democratic settlent in Berenzino. These four groups have recently all signed a armistice but no one expects the peace to last long. Chernaurus 2038 has been heavily inspired by the Metro Universe and past and current groups in DayZRP. I'm doing this for my own entertainment but maybe I'll release some of it when its ready. 

    Regardless, I'd like to reiterate that there's no plans for a lore wipe or a lore jump for BETA. 

  5. Is it still your intention to rp this group @Mr. Blue? Many of your members including yourself are not playing as your group character or are not playing at all. Allow me to remind you that playing as a different character does not contribute to group activity. 

  6. Hello @XxGrAipYyxX, here's my feedback after doing a couple read overs.

    • There's still some grammar issues especially regarding capitalization. One more thorough read should do the trick. 
    • Goals one, three, and eight are pretty much universal among all groups at this point so I would just remove them but it's up to you. 
    • Somewhere, in your case probably in a spoiler, you need to have all your member's profiles linked. 

    Overall I'm very confused as to what your group actually is. Initially I was getting a mercenary vibe, but then you start talking about a coalition, and finally you you end with cowboys. Trying to be all three would make your group appear very generic. At least for the time being you should focus on one direction and go full throttle. I look forward to your changes. Let me know if you want any help. Thanks.  


  7. Hey @Taryn, your group's activity is ok. You have a few members who haven't been in game in about a week and one who hasn't been in game in over three weeks. I would get in contact with that member and find out whether they can become active or not. How are your goals going? Three of you goal's timestamps have elapsed and you need to either remove them if you accomplished them or update them if you are still working towards completing them. Is the group being received how you want it? Are you encountering any obstacles to you and your group's rp? Please make these changes and answer these questions when you can. Thanks. 

  8. Grimnir has a point, you were asked to update your goals a week ago and they still stay the same as they did day 1 for this group. Therefore considering you've already been given a 7 day period to change your goals and you have failed to do so, this group will be force archived in 10 hours unless they are changed. Thanks. 

  9. Hello @Mr. Blue, it's been a couple weeks since this groups approval and everything seems to be going smoothly. I just wanted to remind you that a couple of your goal's timestamps have expired so you need to either replace them or update them. Let me know if have questions or need help. Thanks. 

  10. If he was flying to Russia then how wohld he notice a settlement in Chernaurus? Not only that, but this sounds like day 1 of the infection, there really wouldnt be any settlements up and running on day 1. I would stay away from any plane crash stories as they are drowned upon but there are plenty of reasons that a US soldier would be going to Chernaurus so let me know if you need ideas.