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Well we could show some of his childhood, maybe a bit of it at the bar. We also don't know much about his personality. Maybe get into his divorce, and how he learned to live in the forest?

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joost4533    0

Well we could show some of his childhood, maybe a bit of it at the bar. We also don't know much about his personality. Maybe get into his divorce, and how he learned to live in the forest?

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No mistakes in what you have written. But improvements could be to shed light on his personality, his skills and maybe a bit more of his past. You explained how John Russo came to be in the zombie apocalypse and how he survived, but not enough on John Russo himself.

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