Patrick Harris

[Lemons]

My name is Patrick Harris, Im 20 years old.

I was raised in a small town, i always had to work very hard to get what i want. I was living a life where i didn't get what i wanted usually.

My life was always circling around hard work and i didn't like i, constantly i wanted to change my life but i didn't know to what i wanted.

Olny thing that i really liked about my hard work was going hunting with my father every week once, teaching me how to survive in the wilderness. 

Also my father was a pilot. I didn't know my mother really cause she left when i was still child. On holidays me and my father went flying with his plane, tought me also few things about being a pilot, but at that time i didn't pay much attetion do it cause i was sure that i was never gonna use it.

So few years past, me and my father are just relaxing and watching news, then all of the sudden a emergency broadcast comes on, but as soon the emergency broadcast came on the tv desided to broke, so we didn't know what was going on. We went to the neighbours to see what was going on but as soon as we got there they seemed to be in a hurry to get away.

We asked what's going on they said some sort of virus broke loose and dead people are coming back to alive. So we run fast back to home to pack our stuff and get ready for whatever is coming, we search trough the neighbours houses also to get some extra food that they might have left behind. Then we head to the barn where we had our plain just in case to get out of this shit storm. We got to the barn and we see few bloody humans walking around, well we tought they were humans. After they spotted us they came sprinting after us so me and my father shoot at them but they still seem to be running at as so we aim for the heads. We get to the plane, and we tought it will be a good idea to fly out of here to some where safe.

We were up in the air flying for many hours, as we were running low on fuel we decided to land at the closest airfield and it was in chernarus. So i decided to

scavenge around for some supplies while my father was refueling the plane. As i look from the distance at the plane and i see 3 soldiers aproaching my father they tell him something in a native language but he dosen't understand so they tell him in english to drop his weapon and put his hands up. But my father did something unthinkable and he shot one the soilders and killed him then the other soilders killed my father. I was in a deep shock, cause i didn't know why my father did it and lost hope for survival. So after that incident, i just moved around chernarus scavenging for some supplies cause all of mine were in the plain, didn't really care for my life till i found a friend along the road.

That's my story...

[Nocheluz]

It's a good beginning to your story. Would love to see where his travels take him and how surviving affects his emotions and psyche. Got some typos in there that, if cleaned up, would help the story be as clear as it can be, and look cleaner. There are writing guides in the Guides and Tutorials section that will help with that.

Otherwise, you've got a good start on your hands

[Lemons]

It's a good beginning to your story. Would love to see where his travels take him and how surviving affects his emotions and psyche. Got some typos in there that, if cleaned up, would help the story be as clear as it can be, and look cleaner. There are writing guides in the Guides and Tutorials section that will help with that.

Otherwise, you've got a good start on your hands

Thanks for the feedback!

[Zunn]

A few mistakes are here and there, for example:

I was raised in small town

Instead of I was raised in a small town, perhaps just a re-read would be beneficial other than that it's a good start.

[Lemons]

A few mistakes are here and there, for example:

I was raised in small town

Instead of I was raised in a small town, perhaps just a re-read would be beneficial other than that it's a good start.

Okay i made few changes, should be good now. Thanks for pointing out few things

[Lemons]

Chapter 2!

I've been running through the lands of chernarus searching for supplies and trying to survie. One of my main problems and fears

are trusting other people cause I don't really trust anybody after what happend to my father. But on my journey I met a guy called Joshua, he seemed fine but he always seemed To act strange and creepy, I was always suspicious about him. After sitting some time in Green mountain I met a guy called Rick, he really grew on me fast.

After some time both of us were hungry so we head out and left Joshua. We headed to Pogorevka and we started a farm there for some time.

As Rick was feeling sleepy he went to sleep and I left after sometime passed, I went back to Green Mountain to see if Joshua was still there which he was.

So we sat there for sometime i went to take a nap inside a fallen tree. As I woke up and I saw Joshua talking to some girl and two guys who were acting strange.

Long story short Joshua told them to leave, but they didn't listen so he thought of capturing them and question them. While that all was happening

I managed to sneak inside of a building. Short after Joshua wanted to capture them, they shot at him. Which in that situation

I grabbed my gun and killed one of them. Then I sat inside the building and waited some time to see if the other guy ran away.

I was about to leave the building, but then the other guy shot at the door and I knew that this could be the end of me but I maneged to kill him also.

After all that I didn't see Joshua any where so I thought he got lucky and escaped later. Then I went back to my farm and saw 

Rick was awake and I told him the story. Short after that I went to sleep to forget the horrible night.

To be Continued...