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OOC: Before i start you should know that this character is not in play yet, due to the fact of the white lists not being up. Please reply and tell me what you think.

First Name: Carl

Last Name: Bendek

Nickname: Rabbit

Age: 20

Height: 6'1

Weight: 190 lbs

Hair: Brown

Eyes: Sky Blue

Pre-Outbreak Profession: College Student

Medical Record: Acromegaly Syndrome (Stage 1 Cancer) (It deepens your voice dramatically)

Demeanor in Three Words: Friendly, Cautious, Courageous

Lets begin...

The story starts in Canada, inside of a city named Ottawa, i grew up in New Orleans on 502 apple ford street. I lived with both my parents up until i was 8. My parents split up and few weeks later my father was killed in a car accident on Montreal avenue. From there i had a slightly odd childhood. Being the one child without a father not only in school but my neighbor hood. Every year i visited my father's grave for his birthday on June 19th. Up until i was 18. I graduated high school and was about to start my freshman year at the college in Ottawa called Algonquin College. I entered the school on my first day with my head held high with the only friends i trust and actually enjoyed being around with, Stanwyck White and Tyson Edwards. Tyson became my roommate in my dorm room. After a few weeks of attending the college, a opportunity was offered to me and Tyson for me and him to travel and attend to a college in Krakow, Poland. I was astonished with the offer and took it right away and so did Tyson, of course my mother was worried that something would happen or i would get stuck there...

When we arrived at the airport we were excited to travel to Poland and eager to start the journey. I got on the plane along with Tyson with all my bags and his already set in the compartments. I looked out the window and fell asleep. I woke up to a loud shaking of turbulence, of course i was frightened due to the fact it was my first time on a plane ever. I then drifted off asleep again. I finally woke up to the sound of the planes attendants and pilots message to us that we have arrived. I finally leave the airport in a cab riding it to the college. We finally arrive after the long journey and greeting when i enter the building and immediately escorted to my dorm room with Tyson for a roommate. I finally fell asleep on my first night there and began my courses the next day.

After a month or two me and Tyson finished most of our courses and was two weeks away before we were going back home. With the time I've spent at the college i became friends with many and have started dating a girl named Kate Pilgrim for 3 weeks now, and have been invited by a couple of friends to a party. We both arrived and enjoyed the party after a few hours and wen't back to my dorm room and luckily my roommate wasn't there so we layed in bed talking to each other about what we'll do when i have to leave in two weeks time, and we both agreed to keep in touch and try the long distance relationship. three days until i was leaving to go back home, and it was mentioned on television that there was some kind of infection occurring in the Czech Republic. At that point i was concerned and the next day i was already packing my bags for the next day and attended my last classes here. The next morning we left by car leaving Poland to arrive in the Czech Republic.

We then make it in Chernarus. In two days time we start driving so we can leave again by car to drive over to Germany so we can catch the plane to Canada. While we were driving me and tyson were talking about what we will do when it comes to our girl friends. We were talking until we heard gun shots and a APC drove down the opposite side of the road of us heading towards Elektrogorsk where we just passed through, and then we saw human beings swarming the city up ahead, we went the long way around to avoid going inside the town. Tyson begins to speak saying "What the hell is going on!". I begin to start trembling in fear and start to panic, yelling things like "Were going to die!". I then look back at him while hes looking at me for a answer and notice a truck speeding towards us hitting his passenger door knocking him out. The truck ends up rolling us upside down and a military Ural is speeding on the left side of the road where we were pushed on. It then collided with us knocking me out.

I woke up a week or so later in a coma with the chaos and infection calmed down a little more then before I've seen it. I was in a house in the city of Chernogorsk laying in a bed with a man watching over me. He speaks with a Russian accent "Наконец, проснулся да?". I then responded with "What?" He then reply's again with "I said finally awake huh?" I then nod silently and look back at him and respond again with "Where am i?". He then speaks and says "Your in Chernarus, To be more specific Chernogorsk city.". I look at him wide eyed and reply quickly with "What happened?". He then sighs and begins to speak "You were in the car crash you were the only one that had survived from what i have seen with some pretty major wounds that weren't tragically terrible.". I then rise and sit up and think, Looking around he then offers me a drink and i nod and thank him for the glass of water i then begin to think about where tyson might be. A few hours later we hear gunshots and a loud pound on the door. Then it got louder and louder, then the door starts to flex and break under the pressure and then the door flys open and the stranger picks up his gun and runs out into his living room closing the bedroom door behind him locking it. A few gunshots are heard then a scream. I reacted fast, i grabbed what i could and then opened the bedroom window and escaped out of house.

1 week later, i am on top of the hospital in Elektrogorsk and am looking over the city searching for other survivors and some items that would be useful. I then climb back down the ladder and am striked behind the head and i am knocked out instantly. I again wake up with 4 men standing over me on the street looking through my bag and taking all of my stuff out and putting it into their bags and their SUV. They were all wearing a scarf looking thing on the head covering their face leaving the eyes exposed for sight. I pass out again with one of the men's rifle striking my face knocking me out. I then wake up again tied to a tree in the woods with two men standing in front of me. They then say "What is your name you useless ba****d". I respond and say "I don't know" (Lying). They then say "Fine, we'll refer you to a John Doe sort of name, how about..." He trails on. He then finishes his sentence and says "Rabbit." he then chuckles to the name. The two men walk away for awhile and then come back in three instead. They then begin laughing as they walk back. The one man grabs my hand and says "We're just gonna have a little fun". I then open my eyes wide at the sight of a knife being pulled out.

Then i screamed. He cut off my left pinkie finger and have put it in a box. They then notice the abnormally deep voice and begin to question whats wrong with me. I respond with "Acromegaly syndrome, stage 1 cancer". They then curse and step back for a second shouting, "This guy has fucking cancer, Vector won't wan't cancer filled organs you idiot!". They then smack my head again and i am awakened in the middle of nowhere with nothing but my shirt pants and my shoes. I then follow the suns location and head south to make it back to the shore line. I look at my hand bandaged and missing a finger, with enormous pain surging through it, its as if i can feel each heart beat each time in my hand. I then finally reach Balota and notice the airstrip. I avoid going there because of how dangerous and filled with zombies it was, i then moved on heading back to Chernogorsk to end up right back where i started a week and a half ago, alone.

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Guest DreddLoks

Nice Story! A lot of detail, good work!

Thanks! Look forward to role play!

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Guest DreddLoks

Yeah Looking forward to seeing you around!

Same to you!

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Stagsview    625

Just edit it around to make it look a bit prettier for the eyes. But all in all a fair job m8.

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Reece    1

Very good story a lot of detail !

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Guest DreddLoks

Thanks for all the feedback, this took me 3 hours of planning. Luckily this is the shorten version!

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Guest DreddLoks

He has some pretty big bruises and 2 hours to write 1 hour to research certain things...

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