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Jock Connor
Character information
  1. Alias
    Jock
  2. Mental
    Stable, but has triggers
  3. Morale
    Morally Good with Conflicts
  4. Date of birth
    1990-05-21 (29 years old)
  5. Place of birth
    Huntington Beach
  6. Languages
    English
  7. Relationship
    Sarah Connor
  8. Family
    Emily Connor, Jason Connor
  9. Religion
    N/A

Description

  1. Height
    129 cm
  2. Weight
    170 kg
  3. Build
    Medium Muscular
  4. Hair
    Brown
  5. Eyes
    Green
  6. Alignment
    Chaotic Good
  7. Occupation
    Forest Ranger
  8. Affiliation
    N/A
  9. Role
    Scout Sniper

Background

Jock Connor, will be a californian forest ranger who survived the apocolapse when off on vacation when traveling through Chernarus to backpackw ith his wife Sarah. Just looking to survive with my friends, and help people when possible. But through that, he has watched all his friends die in his arms, causing him to have a twisted past due to bandits and betrayals. You never know what he might do now when engaged upon, and has lost his trustworthy nature. He has an existential crisis between good and evil and he is going through those problems as we speak. His survival outdoor knoledge is what has kept him alive all these years living alone after his family and friends were murdered. Jock Connor is also a weapons expert and believes in personal protection at all times. His favorite weapon of chose is the Colt 1911 that his wife gave him for his last birthday present before the outbreak. When bandits killed his family they took the gun with them, he is on the search for the weapon as it is one of the last memories of his wife, and regular world that no longer exists.


1 Comment


There are a fair amount of spelling errors, i'd reccomend reading your story out loud and fixing anything that sounds off or wrong. Also, keep in mind its been 2 years since the outbreak, so is he still finding that elusive gun of his, or has he moved on and made peace? There are also changes in who's telling the story. At first, you say "Jock Conner will be" but midway through you say "Just looking to survive with my", which is a shift in who is telling this story. Things like that are easy to slip by, but can easily turn a good story into an extremely ameuterish one. 

 

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